Very interesting. Based on a true story, as the saying goes? I was about to say that your observations here are penetrating, but based on the subject matter, that seemed wrong ;-)
Hi Brooklyn, it feels to me like the thematic material of the entire poem is recapitalized very clearly in these final three lines. The entire poem is, of course, brilliant. (Sorry, not articulating well at the moment.)
Ummmmmmmmmmmmm. I feel called out. I feel uncomfortable. Are you in my mind? It's too real...
Bold and confrontational, forcing one to self reflect on uncomfortable truths. Well done.
Thanks, Jordan. It’s important that we call it out for what it is sometimes.
Some really nice lines within that. I enjoyed it a lot.
Thank you so much for reading, Gary! It was fun writing it with the tail rhymes in between.
Very interesting. Based on a true story, as the saying goes? I was about to say that your observations here are penetrating, but based on the subject matter, that seemed wrong ;-)
STEVEN! 😭 Stroke of genius, one might say.
So many potential jokes here . . . .
Have at it. Write an entire poem, even! 🤸🏻♂️
About a burning bush? 😉
Careful now! Or will end up publicly executed!
Wow, this is just brilliant, Brooklyn! 👏👏👏
"repress,
and deny in shame while dying to
confess."
Hi Brooklyn, it feels to me like the thematic material of the entire poem is recapitalized very clearly in these final three lines. The entire poem is, of course, brilliant. (Sorry, not articulating well at the moment.)
In my heart there is no sin, for everything is an expression of the state within. Oodles of love to you as you always create from your heart. xo
These lines 👏🏽
“What you two have done behind the stall
will mess
with your song and worship in the hall.“
Thank you so much for reading! The duality of religious guilt is a fascinating subject to me. 🙏🏻😔