Hey, thanks! I want to try a few more sporadically. Might even give your form a try with some repetition sprinkled in there! With your permission, of course. 🙏🏻
I was thinking about Bobby Darin’s Beyond the Sea, which is admittedly way more cheerful than my poem. Long-distance really gets you to long and yearn. :’)
Lovely imagery, Brooklyn. And indigo is such a mellifluous color name, isn't it? "Mood Blue" wouldn't have been nearly the memorable song title that "Mood Indigo" is.
Man, you're killing it with these poems with the repeated rhyme. Nice work, this is a wonderful read.
Hey, thanks! I want to try a few more sporadically. Might even give your form a try with some repetition sprinkled in there! With your permission, of course. 🙏🏻
Do it! I'd love for people to use the Sal form. It's open for anyone to use.
This is really beautiful! No words I could say would be a good comment it’s just damn good. 😊
Sometimes short and sweet is better than a full poem! Thank you so much for stopping by. 🙏🏻
Have to agree with that! Hope you are having a lovely day!
Hi Brooklyn, I really liked this line:
Beyond the sea, she’s there—my home—
I love that line, too. 🥲 So many feelings attached to it.
Yeah, it’s an interesting use of an em dash.
aw, i loved how you weaved indigo with the sea foam. something about it really spoke for longing.. great work!
I was thinking about Bobby Darin’s Beyond the Sea, which is admittedly way more cheerful than my poem. Long-distance really gets you to long and yearn. :’)
a vintage, bittersweet type of longing, then? :") always love hearing artist influences, thank you for sharing! and i can imagine. </3
Beautiful and heartbreaking. This could just as easily have been written by an old sailor from long ago which also makes this relatable.
I suppose longing never changes. Even with the advantages of technology, distance is still the same as it was hundreds of years ago.
Oh, Brooklyn... I cannot say how beautiful this is. It just is. I hope someday she will know.
Here’s hoping. :’))
Beautiful, it reads so well with that rhythm.
Thank you, Gary! I was loosely going for a shanty-ish feeling but ended with something a bit different.
Love the rhythm and imagery!
Thank you! A bit simpler than usual, but I’m fond of it.
I LOVE the rhythm.
THANKS! A little simple but fun to write!
Lovely imagery, Brooklyn. And indigo is such a mellifluous color name, isn't it? "Mood Blue" wouldn't have been nearly the memorable song title that "Mood Indigo" is.
It’s a beautiful color, too! Definitely a sight of beauty out by the shore before dawn and after sunset. Thanks for reading, Steven!
So well done!
Thanks a lot!!!
You’re incredible!
So are you!!!
Why thank you 😊
Beautiful!
Thank you! Very kind of you. 🙏🏻
So colorful and painful at the same time. Love the contrast 💙
Oodles of love resplendent one <3
What a word painting, bravo